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Spending Time END - Remadeby *Edowaado

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Remade version of page from May.

Note: I said I've taken a little break from my comic to improve on my art. I've finally gotten able to do colored lineart, but I'm not sure if the black lineart added more drama to it. Also I'm not quite satisfied yet.

Critique by ~Theedarkcorner Feb 3, 2013, 4:57:40 PM

Wow, some very nice improvements over the original!

While I loved the pen and ink style of the original, the pastel colouring of the new version is closer to show-quality, and as such, helps to maintain suspension of disbelief that this is canon.

Additionally, the thicker outlines make everything seem smoother. They're so smooth I thought they were all vectors at first.

The perspective on the backgrounds and characters have been improved, lines have been straightened out and the characters have been repositioned to fit in each frame.

Their eyes are much nicer, too. Dirpy's eye while she is examining her kitchen looks more natural, as does her sad face in the second to last panel.

Unfortunately, I actually prefer the stairs in the original. The size, width and perspective on the new stairs makes it look like it could extend through the wall, and the gradients on the steps look slightly odd since they're so uniform and there's no lip on each step. To solve this, you can decrease the staircase's width, make fewer steps and draw a lip on each step or have the gradients going the other way (example: [link]) as well as having a different size and gradient for each step.

When I read this for the first time it had a big impact on me, I felt truly sad for Derpy. Full marks for impact and vision from me

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=the-pink-dragon May 3, 2013 Student Digital Artist

Wow, I love the colored line art! I found your series today, and you have improved so much!

~ShadowTale Mar 25, 2013

saaaaaad

*Lomise Feb 18, 2013 Student Digital Artist

Yes!

So happy that you remade this one!

Love this part.. in a sad way :3

~animegx43 Feb 12, 2013

Someone needs to smack The Doctor until his eyes are like Derpy's.

~P0nies Feb 11, 2013 Hobbyist Digital Artist

I know you say you've taken a break, but you should really start up a new chapter with this, I must know how it is resolved.

~XyndnyAlpha Feb 9, 2013 Hobbyist General Artist

Aawwwwoh.... poor Derpy......

*crys with her then decides to take her and steal the TARDIS to go for a trip and leave notes to change the past!* (cant have immediate contact that would be wrong!)