From my critique in Chapter 9 Part 3 to now, you really did improve in such a short amount of time, and looking back at that strip really brings me nostalgia.
I am going to proceed to critiquing this specific strip:
The characters positioning and expressions are great, and the coloring is really nice. However, sometimes your positioning of the machines around the characters in the background is a bit off. For example, in the second and third panel, the pipes and machine don't really coincide with the walls around it. Though it is really a small detail, but it would be preferable if you could make it nice and geometrically satisfying. Otherwise, great job.
Now for overall critique on wholesale comic:
The anatomy of the characters have gone a LONG way since the beginning, the detail of the background is more specific every strip, and the lighting is more dynamic as you go along. I really mean this, I am astonished by what you are doing. I don't know what it is you are doing, whether you practiced, learned, or whatever, you really are stepping it up.
Not only is your artwork great, but the writing is so superb; your intelligence really is reflected with the dialogue. I especially loves how the Cyber Prince was describing fate, and how it was all calculated. That is true writing right there, and the precision of the language that was executed in that short moment, just amazing.
From my previous critique, can I call you a fully mastered artist? I must say, you are getting there, and near your fullest potential. I have, and will always watch you until the end.
okay I just got to say this is amazing. At first i thought this would be a mildy clever comic done by someone who is good at drawing and decent at writing but you have done a great job of writing. I am a Amateur writer and am currently writing two books and a MLP fan fiction, I absolutly love how you wrote the cyber princes description of the scientific explanation of fate. I always belive that the best gift a fiction writer can have is the ability to expalain anything they come up with by making their own belivible logic and applying it. You have done that and it is awsome!!!!
Okay so now I am completely convinced that someone on the Doctor Who team reads this comic and stole the Foresight/Cyber Prince exchange for Nightmare in Silver. Seriously. Because if they didn't, then that would be just creepy.
Never watch Dr Who, Look for a it of luck this comic, and read all in one shoot whitout reading all the dialog... I can underestan the majority... but... One single Unicorn robot? really? and all the others, Twilight, Twilight Velvet, Written Script, Master, Night Light, etc, all was cybor-roboti-whatever-the-word-is? and the exterior, all surrender with a simple resistance or rebles or either what happen on the exterior
Please keep writing these! The heart and effort put into each comic to me is completely worth it! The story made me cry.. That is not an easy thing to do but it is to show that we care. Even just as readers I feel that the story means something
i need to stay in this page, so i can know what happen to the doctor, derpy, and lyra.....IF YOUR HEARING THIS WRITER!!!! PLEASE FINISH THIS STORY AND MAKE IT QUICK!! OR I'LL HAVE TO FIND YOU AND FORCE YOU TO DO SO....DO YOU HEAR ME, FOOOOOORCE!!!!!!!
This is so good! I can hardly wait for more, although it was a pleasant surprise when I thought I was going to run out at Chapter 10 part 6, and there kept on being another link at the bottom, and there ended up being another 6 pages!